Teacher comments: Mark 22
My predicted mark: 22

student 1
WWW: Decent bibliography. Attempt to use wider context-but give examples!
EBI: Improve use of quotations-use shorter,embedded quotes.include post colonial theory-Alvarado and Fanon. Edit it to make it more concise.textual analysis!

student 2:
WWW:many examples were used to support your points on black representations.
EBI: A few sentences need correction also make sense to sentences to make it flow

student 3:
WWW:good examples and description  of the moving text.also good analysis of the scene
EBI: make the description shorter summarise it more with key points

student 4
WWW; Range of research good and wider context.good use of perkins
EBI: Include more media theorist to support argument

student 5:
WWW:You used media theories to emphasises your point very well
EBI:Get a newspaper article in it to show Moral panic

student 6
WWW: included post-colonialism ethnicity narrative
EBI: need to include Marxism and pluralism

student 7:footnotes
WWW:you understand the concept
EBI;remove links and use Bibme references instead
-when footnoting books follow the sturcture :surname,first name ,initials ,date ,page